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i am fighting with dragons
when i try to spit out any
semblance of reason. the
moment i try to start i am
overcome with what i once
thought was a shortcoming
but i know now to be ghosts
of what i used to value (life)
i am a death
hidden in the
leaves of your
favourite novel
i am honestly bad for the health
of any traveling bard or passing
soldier. i am a plague. i am your
sickness. i am an anaesthetic.
i am a vaccine against
polio/heartbreak/colic
or was is jaundice?
i'm yellow-skinned,
i'm yellow-bellied and
i'm yelling to the sky
like i can't hear the
sirens.
I JUST WANT TO SPEND A DAY
IN YOUR (SOMEBODY'S) ARMS
LIKE I BELONGED, LIKE I WAS
A PART OF THE FAMILY.
APART FROM THE FAMILY.
i can't help SCREAMING because dear
i don't know who "you" are anymore
and nobody is listening to this but
the static is thinning. i'm still the
mountain of broken toys i was
assumed to be so long ago.
i'm pulling my guts out.
i'm pulling my ears.
i'm listening but i
can't hear you.
i'm just head-
banging to
my own
beat.
when i try to spit out any
semblance of reason. the
moment i try to start i am
overcome with what i once
thought was a shortcoming
but i know now to be ghosts
of what i used to value (life)
i am a death
hidden in the
leaves of your
favourite novel
i am honestly bad for the health
of any traveling bard or passing
soldier. i am a plague. i am your
sickness. i am an anaesthetic.
i am a vaccine against
polio/heartbreak/colic
or was is jaundice?
i'm yellow-skinned,
i'm yellow-bellied and
i'm yelling to the sky
like i can't hear the
sirens.
I JUST WANT TO SPEND A DAY
IN YOUR (SOMEBODY'S) ARMS
LIKE I BELONGED, LIKE I WAS
A PART OF THE FAMILY.
APART FROM THE FAMILY.
i can't help SCREAMING because dear
i don't know who "you" are anymore
and nobody is listening to this but
the static is thinning. i'm still the
mountain of broken toys i was
assumed to be so long ago.
i'm pulling my guts out.
i'm pulling my ears.
i'm listening but i
can't hear you.
i'm just head-
banging to
my own
beat.
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I really liked the word choice that you had within this poem, particularly the whole yellow section in the fourth stanza. The word play was very clever and worked extremely well.
I also really liked the second stanza, because I knew exactly what you meant.
Overall though, I thought that the stanzas weren't very unified. There was no imagery that carried all the way through and it left me feeling kind of lost.
I also found the structure of the last stanza kind of distracting, but then I'm not a huge fan of experimental structure.
That's just my two cents, and if you don't find it helpful, you can just ignore my ramblings.
I also really liked the second stanza, because I knew exactly what you meant.
Overall though, I thought that the stanzas weren't very unified. There was no imagery that carried all the way through and it left me feeling kind of lost.
I also found the structure of the last stanza kind of distracting, but then I'm not a huge fan of experimental structure.
That's just my two cents, and if you don't find it helpful, you can just ignore my ramblings.